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The accident on the street
The old brick five-stored building is located in the
outskirts of Novomoskovsk. It is a children's hospital, where my relative is keeping
her bed. Her name is Poluchina Alina and she is 10 years old.
“I am in the hospital, because last week I fell from a
tree and broke my right leg,” Alina says. “I don’t know how long I have to stay
here.”
The accident occurred three weeks ago. She decided to
go for a walk with her yorkshire terrier Suzy. During the walk she was running
and training her dog. Then she wanted to swing and climb a tree. She tied up a
dog and started ascending a plant. When the girl did it her foot slipped and she
fell.
“I think it all happened in a split second,” she
remembers. “Firstly, I was on a tree and in a second I was already lying flat
on the ground. I felt acute pain in my leg. I started crying. Then my elder
sister noticed me and went out of the house. She phoned our parents and emergency.”
After this shocking accident a girl was operated immediately
and now she is keeping her bed in the children's hospital. The mother has to
stay with her during the whole day. Every week the father, the sister and
grandparents visits her. Doctors says that everything is ok and Alina will be
able to come back home before New Year.
Her mother, very tired, says that when her daughter
broke the leg she was working in Moscow and she could come to the hospital only
after some time. All relatives worry about the girl. They bring every weekend
some juice, fruits and vegetables and, of course, a lot of candies. Sometimes
Alina’s grandmother stays with her for the night, instead of her mother.
“It was unexpected for me that my granddaughter has
broken her leg,” she says. “Poor girl…Just last year she had dislocated her
foot and now this accident happened.”
When I came to Alina I was shocked how many children
there were. Every ward was full of children from 5 till 18 years old. I got
interested to find out how often children or just people break something.
According to the electronic science journal, kids are mostly
exposed to fractures, because they are more active than adults. Children
damages are slight injuries in most cases. They can be damaged at home, out of
doors, at school and etc. That is why there are a lot of children in the
hospitals. Extensive and heavy traumas are an exception to the general rule;
they average 5-7% of all injuries. In spite of this kids get over quicker than
grown-ups.
In Tula region children damages lower from year to
year, but this is not to say that Tula kids are in safety. Most of them are injured
at home (about 50%) and out of doors (about 40%).
“A great number
of accidents happen in winter, when it is slippery and snowy, but in summer
kids are damaged more often,” says a doctor of a Chelyabinsk children health protection
Centre. “The greatest numbers of injuries occur with boys, they suffer 2-3
times more often than girls. I think parents should be more attentive to
children even if they suppose that their kids have already grown.”
That is really so. Most parents are sure that their
children are big enough to take care of themselves, but it’s wrong. Parents
should protect him and explain different things, like matches are dangerous, mind
when you're crossing the road and etc. Also parents should teach their children
to swim, not to open the door for strangers, not to play near the road.
As for Alina I hope she will get better as soon as
possible. She can’t go to school now and has to stay in the hospital, but I think
she’ll return home before New Year holidays and will be able to celebrate it
with her mother, father and elder sister.
“To tell the truth, I would like to do my packing and
go home,” says Alina. “I miss my relatives and friends. Besides, I’m afraid to be
absent from school. I just want to walk, chat with my classmates but not stay
in such bored place”.
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ReplyDeleteAlina, you've done a good job! I liked your feature immensely. In the beginning the headline seemed usual and simple. But I 've decided to read your work and to see how you can reveal this theme further. Afterwards, I was surprised by your descriptive ability. You wrote it according to the all rules. The introduction of your feature grabbed my attention and I was involved in continuation of the story. It was interesting to know about happened accident from the first- person how the heroine felt and thought when she had broken her leg. Also the opinions of the other people were attached in the feature in the right way, because the reader should understand and imagine the complete picture of what happened. Inseperable role plays mentioned statistics. It shows "most of them ( kids) are injured at home (about 50%) and out of doors (about 40%)". That's why the girl isn't single case for years.
ReplyDeleteAs for me, your feature is worthy reading because it touches upon daily problems of parents' negligence. Parents should be more attentive to their children to avoid the accidents.
I think your feature is very...unpredictable. I couldn`t imagine that it is possilble to make an interesting article from such an ordinary situation. I like that you add statistics and quatations, make a mini- analysis. The language is readable, easy for understanding. The headline didn`t grab my attention, but the picture did. It is really appropriate for your story. I agree with Kate, it`s a good job!)
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